POETRY: Broken

Broken

A broken vase, a fallen chair,

A broken heart, betrayal, despair.

 

A trust built like the tallest wall,

And now the bricks lay on the floor.

 

Salty tears, a broken plate,

Shattered trust, betrayal, hate.

 

By Jody Dontje

What does this poem mean to you?

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15 thoughts on “POETRY: Broken

  1. sounds like my marriage (just kidding)! no, to be serious for a moment, to me the poem captures the “tragic fragility” (john gardner) of love. the most amazing love affairs i’ve had in my life haven’t lasted long. the problem is that most of us crave a certain amount of passion in our lives to keep from going crazy with boredom–hence the kooky relationships. thanks very much for liking my poem. i like yours too!

    • Jody Dontje says:

      Hi Harmonioustew,

      I appreciate your willingness to share your experience, and to express how my poem has activated some of your more emotional memories. I wish you well with love from this day forth, and hope nothing good will end.
      It is my pleasure, I am always willing to support other peoples talents. Hope we can continue to support each other.

      Sincerely Jody

  2. Kev says:

    Sounds to me like someone feels really hurt over a broken relationship.

  3. Shayri says:

    The poem i think alludes to fight ,perhaps over something big …hence the broken trust and the crumbling walls.the poet sees himself as the victim…projecting his take of the fight. The said fight was physical with a lot of heartache on the side of either company.
    personally i believe there was a breach of trust so may be an extra martial affairand the poem is the result of the aftermath of the fight….i can interpret more but please tell me if I’m completely offtrack or any of my ramble makes sence!

    • Jody Dontje says:

      Hi Shayri,

      Interesting thoughts! Thank-you for taking the time to analyse and share your thoughts. Indeed the poem portrays heartache and broken trust, as well as, broken people. Any other thoughts?

      Sincerely Jody

      • Shayri says:

        Hey Jody,

        Thanks and honestly this a beautifully written poem :)
        I do have an analogy of sorts…a few more thoughts if you will;
        The poem is in graphic detail, like aforementioned , it is recounts the events or the destruction left behind by two deeply attached people.
        The poet is clearly a victim here. The vase and the plate, the wall are all symbolic of his/her emotional feeling – or heart is you will.
        The last word ‘hate'( I personally feel )adds more depth to the entire meaning because this was no ordinary fight obviously, hate is a potent emotion second or parallel to love . so this heartache and destruction morphing into this feeling of hatred and the repetitive use of betrayal and ‘shattered’ just adds on to the feeling that the poet is very deeply hurt.
        But if I were to generalize the poem I would say it speaks of the ending of relationships. Of how a conflict of needs or a breach of trust can be the cause for an end of something big. The poem captures the raw emotion of every fight that we have with a near and dear one. The betrayal we feel only when someone close to use betrays us….

        I know I got carried away ..but that’s all I guess? the last comment was posted from my mobile hence i could not type out the entire thing. And this I my honest opinion . In retrospect the recurrent mention of the “poet” should not be taken in a personal level!

        Thank You for writing this beautiful poem and moreover expressing a genuine interest in your readers’ opinions!

        -with love
        Shayri :)

        Sorry for the long post !

      • Jody Dontje says:

        Hi again Shayri,

        I honestly must admit that I had yet to encounter such a long and detailed comment on any of my posts. For this I say, thank-you so very much for the time and effort you gave to deliver such a well thought out response. Words cannot explain how much that means to me.

        Your response is completely valid, with evidence from the piece itself to back up your opinion. Indeed you are correct about all aspects of which you spoke, and personally, it shows me that you are a very analytical and attentive person to detail. Well done. Hope to keep in contact.

        Keep up the impressive work!

        Sincerely Jody

      • Shayri says:

        Hey Jody !
        Thank you.. in fact you just made my day !
        You know I could probably type out yet another big post telling just how much I loved this piece and how any amount of the time that i spent in typing out my response was well worth it and more!

        But never the less jokes apart THANK YOU for wanting to know your readers humble views and actually caring enough to make your response know !

        I most certainly hope to keep in touch and read more of your work!

        Sincerely Shayri :)

        There!… another long comment ! :)

      • Jody Dontje says:

        My pleasure!

        That is seriously too kind. Your words mean a lot to me. I have always strived to create a site that nurtures all opinions and where people can feel free to express their passions.

        We will most certainly be keeping in contact. Great comment once more!

        Sincerely Jody

      • Shayri says:

        Hey Jody ,
        I won’t spam your post anymore ! But yes we will most certainly keep in touch !
        Keep blogging and know that you have an eager reader here who’s always hungry for more !
        -with love Shayri

      • Jody Dontje says:

        Thank-you!

        That is truly a motivating thing to hear! Surely more to come!

        Sincerely Jody

  4. My first thought was that of a poem I wrote awhile back:

    infidelity

    leaf
    shade of night
    in fantasy about some lovliness
    a bough over

    o love of the shade
    o love of that lovliness

    o stricken trust

    However, I’ve shared various translations/images from others on any one poem. That’s the cool thing about poetry.
    Have a good one.

    • Jody Dontje says:

      Hi,

      Thank-you for sharing. That is exactly right, everyone is different and so they interpret the same thing differently. I love hearing the various thoughts, so interesting!

      Sincerely Jody

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